Almaz

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 * //Like Water for Chocolate //**** Pre-Writing **
 * Choose one question. Which question did you choose? _3__ **


 * What is your thesis statement? **
 * Example: Tita is a weak character. **

‍‍Reason: Pedro has love at first sight ‍Reason2: When he see her sister naeked ,he transfered to Tita lust Reason 3 When Tita was feeding his son,Pedro had passion for her. Reason 4: Even thoug Pedro is marry ,he sneaks around Tita Reas 5. He is always waiting to have sex with her || ‍Opposite opinion Reason1 Pedro loves Tita becouse he wants marry her, Reason 2: Pedro likes Tita foods. he gives flowers to Tita Pedro marry her sister becouse he needs to be cluse to Tita, Reason 3: Pedro waits to have a sex with his waife becouse he loves Tita. Reson 4: Pedro waited a passintly until mama Elean died to be with Tita Reson 5: || ‍
 * Write your thesis statement here: **
 * Although Tita believes that Pedro loves her, he is not really in love because he just has ‍‍‍lust and passion for her. **
 * Analyze your topic. Look at both sides to understand the issue. Type your reasons below. **
 * Your opinion

= = =**Essay #2 Pre-Writing Response**=
 * Option #1:**

1. What story and theme have you chosen to write about?

2. Why did you choose this theme?

3. Are you going to be concentrating on the 1930s and 1940s in your research or on the present time?

4. Write your "working thesis" here:

5. List some of the sources you will be using in your research. (Remember that your sources must be reliable—they must be from a magazine, newspaper, journal, university or government website, etc. If you can’t identify the source—it’s not acceptable!) Next to each, write why you are using this source. What information does it contain that you think you can use?


 * Option #2:**

1. What marginalized or disenfranchised group of people did you choose for your paper? I am going to use some researches

2. Why did you choose this group? Because i have experience about the elderly in America.

3. What do you know about this group before you do any research? I know some people with this kind of problem.

4. After doing a little research, answer the following questions: I have not start recherche yet.

a. What are some of the causes of the disenfranchise?

they are lonely and forgotten.
b. What are some of the effects of the disenfranchisement? The are lonely I my use library website Gogol

List your sources below: Remember that your sources must be reliable—they must be from a magazine, newspaper, journal, university or government website, etc. If you can’t identify the source—it’s not acceptable!

Essay #1 Final Draft Response
List any feedback you received from April and other people who read your essay. To change my title, spelling errors,Works MIA Punctuation errors,Work Cited and Capital letter. I fixed the correction that you give me. Also, My essay had been read by Serian and Anna from the tutor center and They give me feedback.

List what you changed for your final draft (Ex. Verbs, thesis statement) and **why**. My thesis statement because i want to write about Jody Billy Back and Carl i instead of Jody and Carl. Also, I changed the word that i have been using over and over because when i read my essay i deiced to change anther word to have a good variates of word in essay. For example, I have three times expected and i looked for synonym and i found other words and i used. Also, you, must, may,and i think this all word changed.

If you had more time, what else would you change about your essay? I do not think i will change more than that because i already have changed a lot of things.

What makes you proud about your essay? it took me a very long time to finish my essay because i don't want to make the same mistake that i did before.

Did you like writing about the theme you chose? **Why or why not?**
 * Y**es, because Jody, Carl, and Billy are the best character in the read pony for that reason i decided to write about them

What did you learn in this unit? In this unit i learned about concrete detail that did know before Also, to do per writing several time helped me to develop my essay. I learned about Steinbeck who is amazing writer and about his story.

‍‍‍‍‍‍‍‍‍‍Essay #1 Rough Draft Self-Response ‍‍‍‍‍‍‍‍‍‍
How many paragraphs does your **essay** have? I have four paragraphs in my essay.

Your **introduction** should have 3-5 sentences. How many sentences are in your introduction? Do you need to fix anything? If yes, what? Yes has almost 6 sentences. and i will change my title and spieling error. I will think about to do other changes.

How many **body paragraphs** do you have? I have two body paragraphs.

How many sentences are in: Each **body paragraph** should have 11 sentences. Do you need to fix anything? If yes, what? In the #1 paragraph has 17 sentences. Yes I am going to fix the error that i have and i will look anther changes too. . In my #2 paragraph has 16 sentences. Yes i have to fix my topic sentence and i will make anther changes too.
 * 1) ‍‍‍‍‍‍‍‍‍‍‍Body ¶ #1:17
 * 2) Body ¶ #2:16 ‍‍‍‍‍‍‍‍‍‍‍
 * 3) Body ¶ #3:
 * 4) Body ¶ #4:
 * 5) Body ¶ #5:

Your **conclusion** should have 3-5 sentences. How many sentences are in your **conclusion**? __Do you need to fix anything in your **conclusion**? If yes, what?__ __I don't want fix my conclusion ,but i am going add more sentences because i have only four sentences.__

What is your **word count**? I have 903 word count.

You should have 750-1,000 words. Do you need to add more words?

Copy your **thesis** here: In "The Red Pony" by John Steinbeck, Jody has two fathers;Carl,his ‍‍‍‍‍‍‍‍‍‍‍natural father ‍‍‍‍‍‍‍‍‍‍‍,is a very strict disciplinarian who wants Jody to take responsibility, and the other one is Billy Buck,a patient gentleman who teaches Jody more about the important things in life.

Did you prove your **thesis** in the essay? How? If not, can you revise your essay to prove it more clearly? Yes.. i will revise my essay to do the second paragraph more clear with my thesis.

Which __per-writing__ method do you like best and why (bubble clusters, line clusters, columns etc)? I choose the out line because it is more easy for me I use it before.

Based on the feedback and class discussion, write your revised thesis statement her. They did not told me to changed ,but i change it.

Please write the date here: 2/9/12

Please write your name:

Almaz Gebrmeskel Please write your thesis statement

statement:

In "The Red Pony"by John Steinbeck, Jody has two fathers; Carl,his natural father,is a very strict disciplinarian who wants Jody to take responsibility, and the other one is Billy Buck, a patience gentleman who teaches Jody more about the important things in life.

“The Red Pony”

. **In “The Red Pony” by Steinbeck, Jody’s father was a strict disciplinarian who wants Jody to take the responsibility, but Jody expected this harshness from his father.** Then, comment on at least one other person's page.
 * Almaz, you're off to a good start with your thesis. I agree with the comments below. You will be talking about ways Jody's father is a strict disciplinarian and ways Jody expected this. :) April **

1. What is the "source" in the thesis statement? = "The Red Pony" =

2. Does it give the writer's opinion? Why or why not? Yes, the writer's opinion is that Jody's father is a strict father.

3. Does it imply a structure for the essay? How many body paragraphs? Yes, i think the body will be divided into two different parts that about how strict is Jody's father, and how Jody expected this harshness.

(Students with "odd-numbered" tickets, ESL100Student1, ESL100Student3, etc., please comment on the next number going up, so ESL100Student1 comments on ESL100Student2, and students with "even-numbered tickets," please comment on the next number going DOWN, so ESL100Student2 comments on ESL100Student1, and so on.)