Nazret

Although, some people see "Like Water for Chocolate" as a story of women's role in domestic life, the novel demonstrates some persistent personality and dominant character s of women such as Mama Elena, Gertrudis and Tita.
 * //Like Water for Chocolate//** **Pre-Writing**
 * Choose one question. Which question did you choose? ___ Qestion number 2**
 * What is your thesis statement? **
 * Example: Tita is a weak character.**
 * Write your thesis statement here: **

Gertrudis is a power full woman, and she was struggle for her freedom and gender. || Reason 1: Rosaure had no authority over herself. || The woman character in these novel was not dependent in the man. || Reason 2: This text mixed of recipes and stores about domestic life. || The ranch was domain of mama Elena. || Reason 3: Rosaure would like to follow Esperanza her education. || Mama Elena had important role in the society. || Reason 4: Rosaure as a woman was dependent on the competence and skill of others. || Most of the months story represented Tita talent and her influence to the society. || Reason 5: The women have traditional role. ||
 * Analyze your topic. Look at both sides to understand the issue. Type your reasons below.**
 * ** Your opinion ** ||  ** Opposite opinion **  ||
 * Reason 1:
 * Reason 2:
 * Reason 3:
 * Reason 4:
 * Reason 5:


 * Essay #2 Pre-Writing Response**
 * Option #1:**

1. What story and theme have you chosen to write about? I have chosen the story "Chrysanthemums" about "The Role of Woman in the Stienbeck's Time".

2. Why did you choose this theme? I chose this theme because the woman named Elsa is a strong woman. She is attempting to extend her abilities into masculine. She is devoted to her work with great passion.

3. Are you going to be concentrating on the 1930s and 1940s in your research or on the present time? I am absolutely to be focused in my research during the role of woman on the 1930's and 1940's.

4. Write your "working thesis" here: ‍‍The "Chrysanthemums" is a short story by Steinbeck's, describes the woman named Elsa reflection her role in gardening or home makers, equality of the sexes, and the woman academic level. ‍‍ . 5. List some of the sources you will be using in your research. (Remember that your sources must be reliable—they must be from a magazine, newspaper, journal, university or government website, etc. If you can’t identify the source—it’s not acceptable!) Next to each, write why you are using this source. What information does it contain that you think you can use? The follwoing is the sources, and I will be using in my research: 1. www. sanatrosa.edu/library (Journal) 2. Books.google.com 3. [|www.santarosa.edu/library/] (Newspaper) I use this sources because I will get an easily information and supporting idea for my thesis statement. This source has consistent and trustworthy information. It is prepared by knowledgeable people about the topic. It is effectively sources available for helping and developing my skills. I am think that it will contain relevant information to my topics.


 * Option #2:**

1. What marginalized or disenfranchised group of people did you choose for your paper?

2. Why did you choose this group?

3. What do you know about this group before you do any research?

4. After doing a little research, answer the following questions:

a. What are some of the causes of the disenfranchisement?

b. What are some of the effects of the disenfranchisement?

List your sources below: Remember that your sources must be reliable—they must be from a magazine, newspaper, journal, university or government website, etc. If you can’t identify the source—it’s not acceptable!

Essay #1 Final Draft Response
List any feedback you received from April and other people who read your essay.

My thesis statement needs work (I missed her husband part in my thesis statement, but I mentioned in the introduction and conclusion). I also needed some words to punctuation and captial letter.

List what you changed for your final draft (Ex. Verbs, thesis statement) and **why**.


 * I added one main idea to my thesis statment.

If you had more time, what else would you change about your essay? I will change my thesis statement.

What makes you proud about your essay? I spent many hours working on my essay, and I did it myself.

Did you like writing about the theme you chose? **Why or why not?** There is no balance in their activity.
 * No, At** the first time, I like my thesis statement. When I started to write the main point, it was very limited idea. I cannot find many great ideas.

What did you learn in this unit? I learned to pay attention on capital letter and punctuation. I clearly understand the difference between concrete and commentary ideas. .

‍‍‍‍Essay #1 Rough Draft Self-Response ‍‍‍‍
How many paragraphs does your **essay** have? My essay has four paragraphs.

Your **introduction** should have 3-5 sentences. How many sentences are in your introduction? Do you need to fix anything? If yes, what? My introduction is 17 sentences. Yes, I need to less my introduction sentences.

How many **body paragraphs** do you have? I have two body paragraphs.

How many sentences are in:


 * 1) Body ¶ #1: I have eleven sentences
 * 2) Body ¶ #2: I have eleven sentences.
 * 3) Body ¶ #3:
 * 4) Body ¶ #4:
 * 5) Body ¶ #5:

Each **body paragraph** should have 11 sentences. Do you need to fix anything? If yes, what? No, I do not need to fix my body paragraph.

Your **conclusion** should have 3-5 sentences. How many sentences are in your **conclusion**? __Do you need to fix anything in your **conclusion**? If yes, what?__ I have eight conclusion sentences. Yes, I need to less my conclusion sentences.

What is your **word count**? It is 669 word count.

You should have 750-1,000 words. Do you need to add more words? Yes, I need to add more words.

Copy your **thesis** here: I have chosen to write about "The White Quail", by John Steinbeck about a woman named Mary and her interest in gardening as well as her excitement on the result of her works.

Did you prove your **thesis** in the essay? How? If not, can you revise your essay to prove it more clearly?Yes,‍‍‍‍ I need some revise in my T**hesis** **statment ‍‍‍‍.**

Which __pre-writing__ method do you like best and why (bubble clusters, line clusters, columns etc)? Great! +5  I like **the Outline** pre-writing method because, first my essay is a very short paragraph, and it can give me some clue for my first draft essay. It will easily guide me through the order and relationship of the main points.

Based on the feedback and class discussion, write your revised thesis statement here:

The short story "WhiteQuile" from John Steinbeck describes a women named Mary and her fascinating in gardening as well as excitment on the result of her works.

Please write the date here:February 09,2012

Please write your name: Nazret

Please write your thesis statement: The Story "White Quile" form John Steinbeck describes a women named Marry and her fascinating in gardening as well as excitment on the result of her works. Hi Nazret, this is a great start. I can see that you will have body paragraphs about her fascination wtih gardening and her excitement as a result of her work. Please include the author's name in your thesis too. :) April

Then, comment on at least one other person's page.

1. What is the "source" in the thesis statement?

"THe White Quail"

2. Does it give the writer's opinion? Why or why not?

Yes, because is talking about the facinating in garden, and not might eveyone thinks the same way.

3. Does it imply a structure for the essay? How many body paragraphs?

I think two body paragraphs

(Students with "odd-numbered" tickets, ESL100Student1, ESL100Student3, etc., please comment on the next number going up, so ESL100Student1 comments on ESL100Student2, and students with "even-numbered tickets," please comment on the next number going DOWN, so ESL100Student2 comments on ESL100Student1, and so on.)