Maria


 * //Like Water for Chocolate//** **Pre-Writing**
 * Choose one question. Which question did you choose? _2__**
 * What is your thesis statement? **
 * Example: Tita is a weak character.**
 * Write your thesis statement here: this novel only shows the traditional roles for women with Tita, Rosaura and Mama Elena. **
 * In spite of the fact that the novel "Like Water For Chocolate, " appears to be a feminist novel because its main characters are women, it shows **** the traditional roles during the Mexican Revolution with Tita, Rosaura and Mama Elena. **

Tita obeys her mother in everything she says. || Reason 1: Tita did not accept that Mama Elena wants she follows her orders without an oppinion. || she wants to keep her family tradition with her daughter Esperanza. || Reason 3: Rosaura could tell her mother that she noticed that Tita is in love with Pedro. Rosaura could refused to married Pedro. ||
 * Analyze your topic. Look at both sides to understand the issue. Type your reasons below.**
 * ** Your opinion ** ||  ** Opposite opinion **  ||
 * Reason 1:Tita accepted the tradittion of not marry and take care of her mother until she dies.
 * Reason 2: Mama Elena took the role of man because she is a widow . || Reason 2: Mama Elena is an importante women in the ranch. ||
 * Reason 3: Rosaura is traditional because she cares about what society thought about her and
 * Reason 4: Tita is always involve in the kitcken cooking, cooking ....... || Reason 4: Mama Elena could let Tita marry with Pedro. ||
 * Reason 5: Mam Elena is traditional with the traditional customs. || Reason 5: Mama Elena did not accept opinions. ||


 * Essay #2 Pre-Writing Response**
 * Option #1:**

1. What story and theme have you chosen to write about? I have choosen "The Chrysabthemums" about ‍‍‍women lives in the past. ‍‍‍ 2. Why did you choose this theme? I choose this theme because I want to compare the way of live in the past with the present time.

3. Are you going to be concentrating on the 1930s and 1940s in your research or on the present time? ‍‍I am going to be concentrating in the past and I might use some information on the present time. ‍‍

4. Write your "working thesis" In 1930s and 1940s, women's roles in society were limited because women were just to stay at home; however, ther were a few women who demostrated that women are capable and intelligent to do incomparable jobs in the U.S. history.

5. List some of the sources you will be using in your research. (Remember that your sources must be reliable—they must be from a magazine, newspaper, journal, university or government website, etc. If you can’t identify the source—it’s not acceptable!) Next to each, write why you are using this source. What information does it contain that you think you can use? The Long Valley by John Steinbeck, computer, etc.


 * Option #2:**

1. What marginalized or disenfranchised group of people did you choose for your paper?

2. Why did you choose this group?

3. What do you know about this group before you do any research?

4. After doing a little research, answer the following questions:

a. What are some of the causes of the disenfranchisement?

b. What are some of the effects of the disenfranchisement?

List your sources below: Remember that your sources must be reliable—they must be from a magazine, newspaper, journal, university or government website, etc. If you can’t identify the source—it’s not acceptable!

Essay #1 Final Draft Response
List any feedback you received from April and other people who read your essay. Move the thesis statement to the end of the introduction. More comments instead of retelling the story.

List what you changed for your final draft (Ex. Verbs, thesis statement) and **why**. I deleted some sentences in the body paragraphs because I was retelling the story. I corrected some grammar mistakes and words choices and I changed the words, migth, I believe.

If you had more time, what else would you change about your essay? If I had more time, I would change my commentaries in the body paragraphs.

What makes you proud about your essay? I am very proud of myself because I finished my essay and I did it all by myself.

Did you like writing about the theme you chose? **Why or why not?**
 * Yes, I loved it because my favorite part was, when Harry killed the white quail. He realized that his wife uses him just to built the garden.**

What did you learn in this unit? I have been learning new vocabulary. I learned to follow the steps in the form shapping the essay.

‍‍‍‍‍Essay #1 Rough Draft Self-Response ‍‍‍‍‍
How many paragraphs does your **essay** have? It has five paragraphs.

Your **introduction** should have 3-5 sentences. How many sentences are in your introduction? Do you need to fix anything? If yes, what? I have five sentence. Yes, I need to do some corrections and I might change my thesis at the end of the paragraph.

How many **body paragraphs** do you have? I have three body paragraphs.

How many sentences are in:


 * 1) ‍‍‍‍‍Body ¶ #1: 5 sentences ‍‍‍‍‍
 * 2) Body ¶ #2: 11
 * 3) Body ¶ #3: 9
 * 4) Body ¶ #4: 11
 * 5) ‍‍‍‍‍Body ¶ #5: 5 ‍‍‍‍‍

Each **body paragraph** should have 11 sentences. Do you need to fix anything? If yes, what? I need to make some changes in the body paragraphs incluiding more comments. ‍‍‍‍‍I will to add more sentences in the second body paragraph. ‍‍‍‍‍

Your **conclusion** should have 3-5 sentences. How many sentences are in your **conclusion**? __Do you need to fix anything in your **conclusion**? If yes, what?__

I have five sentences.

What is your **word count**? 953

You should have 750-1,000 words. Do you need to add more words? No, I do not need to add more words.

Copy your **thesis** here: In the short story "The White Quial" by John Steinbeick, I believe that mary Teller does not love her husband, she is selfish and she wants everything perfect in the way she wishes.

Did you prove your **thesis** in the essay? How? If not, can you revise your essay to prove it more clearly? Yes, I proved my thesis.

Which __pre-writing__ method do you like best and why (bubble clusters, line clusters, columns etc)? Great! +5 I prefer to use bubble clusters and line clusters because is very easy to follow the main ideas of the esssay.

Based on the feedback and class discussion, write your revised thesis statement here: In the short story "The White Quail" by John Steinbeck, I believe that Mary Teller is similar with the white quail because she does not love her husband, she is selfish and she wants everything perfect in the way she wishes.

Please write the date here: February 21, 2012

Please write your name: Maria

Please write your thesis statement: John Steinbeck's short story "The Chysanthemums." I believed that Elisa loves the chrysanthemums for many reasons, such as; she feels lonely, she wishes to do unusual things for women and she wants to be recognized as a woman. Hi Maria, this is a good start. I feel that you clearly stated you will have three body paragraphs about Elisa feeling lonely, wishing to do unusual things for a woman, and wanting to be recognized as a woman. :) April

Then, comment on at least one other person's page.

1. What is the "source" in the thesis statement?

The source in this thesis is. John Steinbeck's short story "The Chrysanthemums."

2. Does it give the writer's opinion? Why or why not?

Yes it gives writers opinion. Because in the sentence it said the writer tells me the Elisa is lonely.

3. Does it imply a structure for the essay? How many body paragraphs?

No doesn’t imply a structure for the essay. Because I fell the sentence doesn’t tells me everything at the end.

(Students with "odd-numbered" tickets, ESL100Student1, ESL100Student3, etc., please comment on the next number going up, so ESL100Student1 comments on ESL100Student2, and students with "even-numbered tickets," please comment on the next number going DOWN, so ESL100Student2 comments on ESL100Student1, and so on.)