Mileiby

**Although Tita and Pedro's true love is never shown in this novel, they experiment lust and an unbelievable passion for each other. **
 * //Like Water for Chocolate//** **Pre-Writing**
 * Choose one question. Which question did you choose? _3__**
 * What is your thesis statement? **
 * Example: Tita is a weak character.**
 * Write your thesis statement here: **


 * Analyze your topic. Look at both sides to understand the issue. Type your reasons below.**
 * ** Your opinion ** ||  ** Opposite opinion **  ||
 * Reason 1:Pedro decided to married Rosaura instead of Tita || Reason 1:Pedro decided to married Rosaura to be closer to tita ||
 * Reason 2:Pedro consummated his marriage with rosaura and have a baby, he doesn't care about tita feelings || Reason 2:Pedro wait months in order to consummate his marriage with Rosaura ||
 * Reason 3:Tita pretend married with John || Reason 3:Tita was confused about her love with John ||
 * Reason 4:Pedro doesn't scape with Tita to shows his love || Reason 4:Pedro and Tita were afraid of Mama Elena to show their love ||
 * Reason 5:Pedro moved to San Antonio with Rosaura living Tita || Reason 5: ||


 * Essay #2 Pre-Writing Response**
 * Option #1:**

1. What story and theme have you chosen to write about?

2. Why did you choose this theme?

3. Are you going to be concentrating on the 1930s and 1940s in your research or on the present time?

4. Write your "working thesis" here:

5. List some of the sources you will be using in your research. (Remember that your sources must be reliable—they must be from a magazine, newspaper, journal, university or government website, etc. If you can’t identify the source—it’s not acceptable!) Next to each, write why you are using this source. What information does it contain that you think you can use?


 * Option #2:**

1. What marginalized or disenfranchised group of people did you choose for your paper? ‍‍Women during the Great Depression. ‍‍

2. Why did you choose this group? Because women during that time had bad time in order to survive; they struggle more than men.

3. What do you know about this group before you do any research? I know that women have jobs, but after the Great depression went back home for domestic labor.

4. After doing a little research, answer the following questions:

a. What are some of the causes of the disenfranchisement? Stereotypes,no money, no work, no food

b. What are some of the effects of the disenfranchisement? Economic went down,women had no much work, women were getting paid less than men.

List your sources below: Remember that your sources must be reliable—they must be from a magazine, newspaper, journal, university or government website, etc. If you can’t identify the source—it’s not acceptable!

Essay #1 Final Draft Response
List any feedback you received from April and other people who read your essay. April told me to change my thesis statement in one sentence, so I used but in order to make one sentence.

List what you changed for your final draft (Ex. Verbs, thesis statement) and **why**. I change some wrong words, two sentences that doesn't fit in the paragraph,and the thesis statement. If you had more time, what else would you change about your essay? If I have more time I don't change anything.

What makes you proud about your essay? Make me proud the way and the time that I took to write this essay.

Did you like writing about the theme you chose? **Why or why not?**
 * Of course, I loved the theme, because it is about the different ways that a person needs to use in order to recapturing trust.**

What did you learn in this unit? I learn a new style of how to write an essay from a story, comprehension while I reading, and new words.

‍‍‍‍Essay #1 Rough Draft Self-Response ‍‍‍‍
How many paragraphs does your **essay** have? It has four paragraphs. introduction, two body paragraph and one conclusion.

Your ** introduction ** should have 3-5 sentences. How many sentences are in your introduction? Do you need to fix anything? If yes, what? Yes, ‍‍‍‍I need to fix the thesis statement because it has 2 sentences, I am going to make just one sentence. ‍‍‍‍

How many **body paragraphs** do you have? I have 2 body paragraph.

How many sentences are in:


 * 1) Body ¶ #1:It has 16 sentences
 * 2) Body ¶ #2: It has17 sentences
 * 3) Body ¶ #3:
 * 4) Body ¶ #4:
 * 5) Body ¶ #5:

Each **body paragraph** should have 11 sentences. Do you need to fix anything? If yes, what? I think that I need to fix the two body paragraph because they have more than 11 sentences.

Your **conclusion** should have 3-5 sentences. How many sentences are in your **conclusion**? __Do you need to fix anything in your **conclusion**? If yes, what?__ ‍‍‍‍My conclusion has 6 sentences, so I need to fix it and make 5 sentences. ‍‍‍‍

What is your **word count**? 998

You should have 750-1,000 words. Do you need to add more words? no

Copy your **thesis** here:

In the story of “The Promise” written by John Steinbeck, Billy Buck falls short of Jody’s trust after the event with the Red Pony in “The Gift” but in “The Promise” is where Billy desperately tried to recapture Jody’s trust in his effort to keep his promise about the colt.

Did you prove your **thesis** in the essay? How? If not, can you revise your essay to prove it more clearly? I think I did prove my thesis in my essay because I wrote about how Billy buck fall short of Jody's trust after the event with the red pony in the "Gift" and how Billy desperately tried to recapture Jody's trust in "The Promise".

Which __pre-writing__ method do you like best and why (bubble clusters, line clusters, columns etc)?

Based on the feedback and class discussion, write your revised thesis statement here:

Please write the date here:Mileiby Caballero

Please write your name: 2/9/2012

Please write your thesis statement: In the story of "The promise" written by john Steinbeck, Billy Buck fall short of Jody's trus after the event with the red pony in the "Gift." In fact, in "The Promise" is where Billy desperately tried to recapture jody's trust in his effort to keep his promise about the colt. Mileiby, this is a good start. I'm wondering if you can combine this into one sentence, because a thesis statement is usually one sentence. I think you could combine both using "but." From reading your thesis, I can see that you will write one paragraph about Billy Buck falling short of Jody's trust with the red pony and another paragraph on how he tries to recapture Jody's trust. :) April

Then, comment on at least one other person's page.

1. What is the "source" in the thesis statement? "The Promise"

2. Does it give the writer's opinion? Why or why not? I think that there is a writer opinion on the presented thesis. However, I think that you are doing a double thesis by presented another one in your subsequent sentence. So I don't think you need to choose one.

3. Does it imply a structure for the essay? How many body paragraphs? I think that there is a margin to express and talk about the mistake (not trust) that Billy did to Jody. But, probably if you mention or go deeper in your thesis statement will facilitate you the writting process. Right now, I think that you have just one paragrapgh to talk about.

(Students with "odd-numbered" tickets, ESL100Student1, ESL100Student3, etc., please comment on the next number going up, so ESL100Student1 comments on ESL100Student2, and students with "even-numbered tickets," please comment on the next number going DOWN, so ESL100Student2 comments on ESL100Student1, and so on.)