Vinh

__**What is your thesis statement? **__ __**Example: Tita is a weak character. **__ __**Write your thesis statement here: **__
 * //Like Water for Chocolate //**** Pre-Writing **
 * Choose one question. Which question did you choose? _2 **

__ Although the male power has the role on Like Water for Chocolate physically and mentally, but the story has highlight the important feminist that represent different characters at Mexican old time society. __

__**Analyze your **__**topic__. Look at both sides to understand the issue. Type your reasons below.**
 * ** __Your opinion__ ** || ** Opposite opinion ** ||
 * Reason 1:

Tita is a character that represent the image of woman fighting against the tradition for her freedom || Reason 1:

Without the support of Doctor John and the death of her nephew, she would not have victim to fight for her freedom. ||
 * Reason 2:

Mama Elena is the example of the power of woman at that time. || Reason 2:

Mama Elena would not be strong without the death of her husband and the accidental pregnancy of her first child. ||
 * Reason 3:

Tita loves Pedro deeply, and fights over Mama Elena to be with him. || Reason 3:

In the story, Pedro makes decision without Tita's opinions. ||
 * Reason 4:

the ranch is a women-dominated space || Reason 4:

But there are male workers on the ranch ||
 * Reason 5:

the story is about the family internal conflict of the relationships between three characters - Tita, Mama Elena and Rosara

something extra: the family starts with only womens the kitchen is primarily occupied by women || Reason 5:

Pedro is making the climax of the conflict, as well as he is main objects of the fight

after marriage, Pedro comes to live together Pedro and ....... are the men in the kitchen ||


 * Essay #2 Pre-Writing Response **
 * Option #1: **

1. What story and theme have you chosen to write about?

2. Why did you choose this theme?

3. Are you going to be concentrating on the 1930s and 1940s in your research or on the present time?

4. Write your "working thesis" here:

5. List some of the sources you will be using in your research. (Remember that your sources must be reliable—they must be from a magazine, newspaper, journal, __university__ or government website, etc. If you can’t identify the source—it’s not acceptable!) Next to each, write why you are using this source. What information does it contain that you think you can use?


 * Option #2: **

1. What marginalized or disenfranchised group of people did you choose for your __paper__? ‍‍i choose illegal immigration from the fake marriages from asian countries, mostly vietnamese. ‍‍

2. Why did you choose this group? I am interested in this topic because there are many fake marriages to have __green card__ and become the U.S. citizen. there are many cases that the fake marriages are brought to light, so they could not have a real life in the U.S.

3. What do you know about this group before you do any research? they could not have __legal document__, could not __buy insurance__, could not work legally, could not go to school, etc.

4. After doing a little research, answer the following questions:

a. What are some of the causes of the disenfranchisement? The life in the U.S. is much better in their own countries, so they accept to lose people's right to stay in the U.S. rather than coming back to their countries. their children futures will be better

b. What are some of the effects of the disenfranchisement? they lose basic human rights. if polices catch them, they will immediately be sent back their countries.

List your sources below: Remember that your sources must be reliable—they must be from a magazine, newspaper, journal, __university or__ government website, etc. If you can’t identify the source—it’s not acceptable!

http://www.cis.org/marriagefraud it is from a group helping those people. http://www.law.fsu.edu/journals/lawreview/frames/243/jonefram.html from Florida state University www.loc.gov/law/find/hearings/pdf/00139298779.pdf document from the government www.uscis.gov/ilink/docView/AFM/.../0-0.../0-0-0-11691.html document from the government http://www.nytimes.com/1994/07/22/nyregion/us-arrests-3-in-immigration-marriage-fraud.html it is the news from NYtime

Essay #1 Final Draft Response
List any __feedback__ you __received__ from April and other people who read your essay. i have spelling error, verb tense, and MLA format error.

List what you changed for your final draft (Ex. Verbs, thesis statement) and **why**. first of all, i change my errors from April, then i change basically my thesis that i make it clearer and logically, so my body paragraph will change definitely, because i see April's recommendation and her point of view which is really helpful for my essay; also i feel i can develop my thesis better in that way, which i can include my first main idea with the better profs.

If you had more time, what else would you change about your essay? i will work on my spelling and run on sentence, as well as my body paragraph because i do not have enough time for __working__ on it.

What makes you proud about your essay? fist, i __work__ really hard that i have change my thesis 3 times to find the best one, second i almost rewrite my essay again which means that my first draft just helps me to be clear with my final thesis, but does not help me in the grammar, and final essay.

Did you like writing about the theme you chose? **Why or why not?**
 * I am not sure what does this question really ask; first i do not write the theme i chose firstly, but i am sure my essay focus on my last chosen thesis. i change my first thesis because i feel it does not make my point logically and perfectly. The last thesis is my plan B when i chose my first thesis; especially april recommends me to write like plan B.**

What did you learn in this unit? i learn a lot, for example, i have to choose a really good thesis that i feel connecting with it, so when i star to work; helpfully i will know what i want to write. other example is about sharing my idea with other people like teachers, friends or just my relative; i feel very helpfull when i talk to them about my thesis, so that they will make me clear on what i want to write about ; also i really need to work on my grammar.

‍‍‍‍Essay #1 Rough Draft Self-Response ‍‍‍‍
How many paragraphs does your **essay** have? i have 4 paragraphs in my essay.

Your **introduction** should have 3-5 sentences. How many sentences are in your introduction? ‍‍‍‍Do you need to __fix__ anything? If yes, what? I just have 2 sentences but it is kind of long, so i do not really know i should fix it or not ! ‍‍‍‍

How many **body paragraphs** do you have? i have 2 body paragraphs

How many sentences are in: Each **body paragraph** should have 11 sentences. Do you need to fix anything? If yes, what? i want to play a little bit with my thesis to make it clearer and logical, so i will change my __second__ paragraph.
 * 1) Body ¶ #1: 12 sentences
 * 2) Body ¶ #2: 11 sentences
 * 3) Body ¶ #3:
 * 4) Body ¶ #4:
 * 5) Body ¶ #5:

Your **conclusion** should have 3-5 sentences. How many sentences are in your **conclusion**? __Do you need to fix anything in your **conclusion**? If yes, what?__

i have 3 sentences, i am not sure that i want to change my conclusion; it really depends on my thesis too because i want to change my thesis a little bit.

What is your **word count**? 963

You should have 750-1,000 words. Do you need to add more words?/ probably i do not need.

Copy your **thesis** here: In the short story- “The Chrysanthemum”, __John__ Steinbeck __borrows__ the image of the chrysanthemum to represent Elisa’s internal life and how unfair society treats women and affected their live deeply and badly.

Did you prove your **thesis** in the essay? How? If not, can you revise your essay to prove it more clearly? yes, i prove my thesis in essay clearly; i show the real person inside elisa __carefully__ by different examples which i also use the same examples to prove the society with women during that time

Which __pre-writing__ method do you like best and why (bubble clusters, line clusters, columns etc)? I like __spider__ diagram because i love the way i can write my thought logically, so i will be clear in my mind how my essay looks like.

= = = Based on the feedback and class discussion, write your revised thesis statement here: = = In //“The Chrysanthemums//” by John Steinbeck, the image of the chrysanthemums represents Elisa’s life with two sides - the pretend person and the real person as the misunderstood flower. =

Please write the date here: 2/9/11

Please write your name: Vinh Huu Truong ( Vincent )

Please write your thesis statement: In //“The Chrysanthemums//” by John Steinbeck, the image of the chrysanthemums represents Elisa’s internal life and how men could never __understand__ the real value of the flower, just as they could not understand the true Elisa inside her. = Hi Vinh, this is a good start. When I read your thesis, I think that you are going to have at least two paragraphs: one on Elisa's internal life and one on how men could not understand her real value. :) April =

Then, comment on at least one other person's page.

1. What is the "source" in the thesis statement?

The Chrysanthemums

2. Does it give the writer's __opinion__? Why or why not.

i feel that he dose give his own __opinion__ of "The Chrysanthemums" he speaks about how men dont understand the real value of the flower just the way they don't understand the true Elisa inside her.

3. Does it imply a structure for the essay? How many body paragraphs?

i think it dose imply a structure for an essay ,there should be about four paragraphs in this essay i think. (

(__Students__ with "odd-numbered" tickets, ESL100Student1, ESL100Student3, etc., please comment on the next number going up, so ESL100Student1 comments on ESL100Student2, and __students__ with "even-numbered tickets," please comment on the next number going DOWN, so ESL100Student2 comments on ESL100Student1, and so on.)