Patricia

**Passion and lust is the main theme in the novel //"like water for chocolate"//**
 * //Like Water for Chocolate//** **Pre-Writing**
 * Choose one question. Which question did you choose? _3__**
 * What is your thesis statement? **
 * Example: Tita is a weak character.**
 * Write your thesis statement here: **

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The effect of the quail in rose petal sauce. || Reason 1: Pedro married Rosaura to be near Tita. || Pedro was always looking at Tita’s body. (breast) || Reason 2: Pedro compliments Tita's food and gives her the flowers || Tita let Pedro discover her body || Reason 3: Tita loves Pedro's kids as hers || They were having an affair for many years. || Reason 4: Tita's love for Pedro makes her body produce milk to breastfeed Roberto || The way they die. || Reason 5: Tita learns about true love when she lost her virginity to Pedro. ||
 * Analyze your topic. Look at both sides to understand the issue. Type your reasons below.**
 * ** Your opinion ** ||  ** Opposite opinion **  ||
 * Reason 1:
 * Reason 2:
 * Reason 3:
 * Reason 4:
 * Reason 5:

= = =**Essay #2 Pre-Writing Response**=
 * Choice #3:**

1. What's your topic? My topic is about the brasero program. I want to write about the money the was taken from these people and how it was taken. 2. Why did you choose it? I choose this topic because my grandfather was a brasero and when a few years after we came to live here there was a organization trying to find relatives from the brasero so they can claim the money that was taken from them supposely as savings but a lot of people never claimed the money. We never did anything to claim the money.

3. What do you already know? I don't know a lot about it, but I read that the bank that was involved was Wells Fargo Bank. 4. Write your "working thesis" here: ‍‍‍‍‍‍I'm still working on my thesis. ‍‍‍‍‍‍ Many Mexicans that participate in the Bracero program were force to save money while they were working in the U.S. 10% of their wages were held by force by the employer and the U.S. government, money that these people never saw again.

5. List some of the sources you will be using in your research. (Remember that your sources must be reliable—they must be from a magazine, newspaper, journal, university or government website, etc. If you can’t identify the source—it’s not acceptable!) Next to each, write why you are using this source. What information does it contain that you think you can use? I'll be using mostly the internet for my research.

Essay #1 Final Draft Response
List any feedback you received from April and other people who read your essay.

List what you changed for your final draft (Ex. Verbs, thesis statement) and **why**.

If you had more time, what else would you change about your essay?

What makes you proud about your essay?

Did you like writing about the theme you chose? **Why or why not?**

What did you learn in this unit?

‍‍‍‍‍‍‍Essay #1 Rough Draft Self-Response ‍‍‍‍‍‍‍
How many paragraphs does your **essay** have? My essay have two paragraphs.

Your **introduction** should have 3-5 sentences. How many sentences are in your introduction? Do you need to fix anything? If yes, what? My introduction has 3 sentences. ‍‍‍‍‍‍‍I need to fix a run on sentence. Also I need to do more work in my thesis statement. ‍‍‍‍‍‍‍

How many **body paragraphs** do you have? ‍‍‍‍‍‍‍I have two paragraphs. Since I'm writing about Jody's transformation, I thought that my first paragraph should be Jody as a child and my second one Jody's behavior as aman, and in my conclusion explaining the transformation of Jody's childhood to adulthood. ‍‍‍‍‍‍‍

How many sentences are in:


 * 1) Body ¶ #1: In my first paragraph I have eleven sentences.
 * 2) Body ¶ #2: In my first paragraph I have fourteen sentences.
 * 3) Body ¶ #3:
 * 4) Body ¶ #4:
 * 5) Body ¶ #5:

Each **body paragraph** should have 11 sentences. Do you need to fix anything? If yes, what? ‍‍‍‍‍‍‍Yes, I have to change some spelling and verb tense in my body paragraphs. I think I need to put more details and more commentaries. ‍‍‍‍‍‍‍

Your **conclusion** should have 3-5 sentences. How many sentences are in your **conclusion**? __Do you need to fix anything in your **conclusion**? If yes, what?__ My conclusion has five sentences. I don't have any comments about changing anything but I will work on my conclusion as I'm going to do with all the parts of the essay.

What is your **word count**? My word count is 755.

You should have 750-1,000 words. Do you need to add more words? I have 755 words but I want to add more to it and make my essay more interesting.

Copy your **thesis** here:

I have decided to write about one of John Steinbeck's short stories, "The Red Pony" in this story Steinbeck describes how Jody, the main character of the story goes through several situations that transforms him from a boy to a man.

Did you prove your **thesis** in the essay? How? If not, can you revise your essay to prove it more clearly? I think I did prove my thesis in my essay because I wrote about Jody being a boy and Jody being a man. I think I need to go over my essay and work more about putting more details and focusing on Jody's transformation.

Which __pre-writing__ method do you like best and why (bubble clusters, line clusters, columns etc)? Great! +5 I like the columns method because I'll be writing about Jody transforming from a child to a man, and this method will help me to have in one side the child and in the other side the transformation to a man. Also, this method will help me see things clearly.

Based on the feedback and class discussion, write your revised thesis statement here:

I have decided to write about one of John Steinbeck's short stories, "The Red Pony" in this story Steinbeck describes how Jody, the main character of the story goes through several situations that transforms him from a boy to a man.

Please write the date here: February 09, 2012.

Please write your name: Patricia Tapia

Please write your thesis statement: I have decided to write about one of John Steinbeck's short stories, "The Pony" in this story Steinbeck describes how Jody, the main character of the story goes through several situations that transforms him form a boy to a man. Hi Patricia, this is a great start. Make sure you have the title as "The Red Pony." I can see that you will be writing body paragraphs about the different situations that Jody goes through to become a man. :) April Then, comment on at least one other person's page.

1. What is the "source" in the thesis statement? The Red Pony

2. Does it give the writer's opinion? Why or why not? Yes, because Jody has 2 different characters as a boy (it means a boy and transformation a man)

3. Does it imply a structure for the essay? How many body paragraphs? Yes, and the essay will have at least 2 body paragraph.

(Students with "odd-numbered" tickets, ESL100Student1, ESL100Student3, etc., please comment on the next number going up, so ESL100Student1 comments on ESL100Student2, and students with "even-numbered tickets," please comment on the next number going DOWN, so ESL100Student2 comments on ESL100Student1, and so on.)