Cecilia

Analyze your topic. Look at both sides to understand the issue. Type your reasons below. Tita is devoted to cooking ||  Reason 1 : ‍Tita speaks with Mama Elena's ghost ‍ ||
 * //Like Water for Chocolate //**** Pre-Writing **
 * Choose one question. Which question did you choose? _2__ **
 * What is your thesis statement? **
 * Example: Tita is a weak character. **
 * Write your thesis statement here: **
 * ‍Despite ‍that the novel "Like Water For Chocolate," appears to be a feminist novel because its main character and her family are women, this is a novel that features women with very reduced, simple, and traditional roles like Tita, Rosaura and Mama Elena. **
 * ** Your opinion ** ||  ** ‍Opposite opinion ‍ **  ||
 * Reason 1:
 * Reason 2:

Rosaura wanted to keep family traditions and her marriage || <span style="color: #000000; font-family: Georgia,serif;">Reason 2: <span style="color: #008000; font-family: Georgia,serif;">Mama Elena threatened the soldiers with a weapon || <span style="color: #008000; font-family: Georgia,serif;"><range type="comment" id="425685"> Mama Elena is only interested in maintaining family traditions <span style="color: #008000; font-family: Georgia,serif;"> || <span style="color: #000000; font-family: Georgia,serif;">Reason 3: <span style="color: #008000; font-family: Georgia,serif;">Rosaura faces Tita near at the end of the novel || <span style="color: #008000; font-family: Georgia,serif;">Tita only thinks of her love for Pedro || <span style="color: #000000; font-family: Georgia,serif;">Reason 4: <span style="color: #008000; font-family: Georgia,serif;">Tita keeps her love for Pedro || <span style="color: #008000; font-family: Georgia,serif;">Tita did not show any opinion about anything. <span style="color: #008000; font-family: Georgia,serif;">Tita knits during her spare time || <span style="color: #000000; font-family: Georgia,serif;">Reason 5: <span style="color: #008000; font-family: Georgia,serif;">Tita sees John as a husband's option ||
 * <span style="color: #000000; font-family: Georgia,serif;">Reason 3:
 * <span style="color: #000000; font-family: Georgia,serif;">Reason 4:
 * <span style="color: #000000; font-family: Georgia,serif;">Reason 5:


 * Essay #2 Pre-Writing Response**
 * Option #1:**

1. What story and theme have you chosen to write about?

2. Why did you choose this theme?

3. Are you going to be concentrating on the 1930s and 1940s in your research or on the present time?

4. Write your "working thesis" here:

5. List some of the sources you will be using in your research. (Remember that your sources must be reliable—they must be from a magazine, newspaper, journal, university or government website, etc. If you can’t identify the source—it’s not acceptable!) Next to each, write why you are using this source. What information does it contain that you think you can use?
 * Option #2:**

1. <range type="comment" id="657591">‍‍‍‍‍‍‍‍‍What marginalized or disenfranchised group of people did you choose for your paper? ‍‍‍‍‍‍‍‍‍
 * Gay Men in El Salvador **

2. Why did you choose this group?
 * Because I knew of crimes committed against gay men, just for being gay. **

3. What do you know about this group before you do any research?
 * I know some gay men and they are like any other person with feelings and intelligence; even more, they are so professional and good people. **

4. After doing a little research, answer the following questions:

a. What are some of the causes of the disenfranchisement?
 * Because they have sex with men and not women **

b. What are some of the effects of the disenfranchisement?


 * Homophobia, hatred, contempt, discrimination against them **

List your sources below: Remember that your sources must be reliable—they must be from a magazine, newspaper, journal, university or government website, etc. If you can’t identify the source—it’s not acceptable!


 * solidarity-us.org/node/1754 **


 * elsalvadorg.com **


 * unchr.org/refworld/country **


 * http//direland.typepad.com/direland/2006/12/el_salvador_new.html **

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Essay #1 Final Draft Response
List any feedback you received from April and other people who read your essay. > List what you changed for your final draft (Ex. Verbs, thesis statement) and **why**. If you had more time, what else would you change about your essay? <span style="color: #008000; font-family: Georgia,serif;">I would added in the conclusion
 * <span style="color: #008000; font-family: Georgia,serif;">I needed an appropriate title
 * <span style="color: #008000; font-family: Georgia,serif; font-size: 16px;">if I have exact words from story, I need quotes
 * <span style="color: #008000; font-family: Georgia,serif;"> I should expand introduction with hook and/or background information and at least 3 sentences
 * <span style="color: #008000; font-family: Georgia,serif;">In body I should write more commentary and less repeating
 * <span style="color: #008000; font-family: Georgia,serif;">Turn in ouline for all paragraphs
 * <span style="color: #008000; font-family: Georgia,serif;">In conclusion: I should expand with summary/prediction/recommendation
 * <span style="color: #008000; font-family: Georgia,serif; font-size: 16px;">MLA Form: I should make sure all words taken from the book are in quotations and check punctuation in Works Cited
 * <span style="color: #008000; font-family: Georgia,serif;">I changed the title.
 * <span style="color: #008000; font-family: Georgia,serif;">I added hook In the introduction.
 * <span style="color: #008000; font-family: Georgia,serif;">I fixed verb tenses
 * <span style="color: #008000; font-family: Georgia,serif;">I expanded the conclusion

What makes you proud about your essay? <span style="color: #008000; font-family: Georgia,serif;">My thesis statement

Did you like writing about the theme you chose? **Why or why not?** <span style="color: #008000; font-family: Georgia,serif;">I liked writing about the theme because of the role of a woman in a traditional marriage. What did you learn in this unit? <span style="color: #008000; font-family: Georgia,serif;">I learned a lot. I have begun reading a very important writer about of the history of the life of the people of California. I've learned to enjoy a Californian writer.

<range type="comment" id="60340">‍‍‍‍‍‍‍‍‍‍‍‍‍‍‍‍Essay #1 Rough Draft Self-Response ‍‍‍‍‍‍‍‍‍‍‍‍‍‍‍‍
How many paragraphs does your **essay** have? <span style="color: #ff0000; font-family: Georgia,serif;">**Six**

Your **introduction** should have 3-5 sentences. How many sentences are in your introduction? Do you need to fix anything? If yes, what? <span style="color: #ff0900; font-family: Georgia,serif;">One compound sentence. <span style="color: #ff0900; font-family: Georgia,serif;">I need fix my Introduction.I need expand with hook and background information.

How many **body paragraphs** do you have? <span style="color: #ff0900; font-family: Georgia,serif;">Five

How many sentences are in:


 * 1) Body ¶ #1: 14
 * 2) <range type="comment" id="694338">‍‍‍‍‍‍‍‍‍‍‍‍‍‍‍‍‍‍Body ¶ #2:
 * 3) Body ¶ #3:
 * 4) Body ¶ #4:
 * 5) Body ¶ #5: ‍‍‍‍‍‍‍‍‍‍‍‍‍‍‍‍‍‍

Each **body paragraph** should have 11 sentences. Do you need to fix anything? If yes, what?

Your **conclusion** should have 3-5 sentences. <range type="comment" id="33262">‍‍‍‍‍‍‍‍‍‍‍‍‍‍‍‍‍‍How many sentences are in your **conclusion**? ‍‍‍‍‍‍‍‍‍‍‍‍‍‍‍‍‍‍ __Do you need to fix anything in your **conclusion**? If yes, what?__ <span style="color: #ff0900; font-family: Georgia,serif;">I need expand it.

What is your **word count**? <span style="color: #ff0900; font-family: Georgia,serif;">865

You should have 750-1,000 words. Do you need to add more words?

Copy your **thesis** here: <span style="color: #ff0900; font-family: Georgia,serif;">Mary and Harry keep a stranger relationship because they have bad communication and the actions and thoughts of Mary rotate around of her garden and herself.

Did you prove your **thesis** in the essay? How? If not, can you revise your essay to prove it more clearly? <span style="color: #ff0900; font-family: Georgia,serif;">Yes

Which __pre-writing__ method do you like best and why (bubble clusters, line clusters, columns etc)? +4 bubble clusters Why?

Based on the feedback and class discussion, write your revised thesis statement here: The story " The White Quail" talks about a woman named Mary that keeps a stranger relationships with her husband because they have bad communication and Mary lives only dedicated to her garden and herself.

Please write the date here:2/8/2012

= = Please write your name: Ana Cecilia López Beltrán

= =

Please write your thesis statement:The story " The White Quail" talks about a woman named Mary that keeps a stranger relationships with her husband because they have bad communication and Mary lives only dedicated to her garden and herself. Hi Cecilia, this is a good start. I think you will have many examples of their bad communication. I think it will be harder with them sleeping in separate rooms. What does this indicate in their relationship? Can you think about this? How can you change the part about sleeping in separate rooms to make your thesis clearer? :) April Then, comment on at least one other person's page.

1. What is the "source" in the thesis statement?

="The White Quail " by John Steinbeck.=

2. Does it give the writer's opinion? Why or why not?

=Yes it does, she use her opinion becouse she thinks they have bad reatinship and bad conication.=

3. Does it imply a structure for the essay? How many body paragraphs?

=Yes,=

=I think the eassy can have two body paragraph about commnication and sleeping in sapreat rooms.=

(Students with "odd-numbered" tickets, ESL100Student1, ESL100Student3, etc., please comment on the next number going up, so ESL100Student1 comments on ESL100Student2, and students with "even-numbered tickets," please comment on the next number going DOWN, so ESL100Student2 comments on ESL100Student1, and so on.)