Eva

**Even though some people think that this noval is romantic and full of love, love is certanly irrelevant, passion and lust takes control of some of the character such as: Tita, Pedro, and Gertrudis. **
 * //Like Water for Chocolate//** **Pre-Writing**
 * Choose one question. Which question did you choose? ___#3____**
 * because in my opinio, if you love somebody you fight for you love and don't marry with somebody else at the first opportunity you have. therefore, this novel is about passion and lust and nothing about true love.**
 * What is your thesis statement? **
 * Example: Tita is a weak character.**
 * Write your thesis statement here: **
 * Analyze your topic. Look at both sides to understand the issue. Type your reasons below.**
 * ** ‍Your opinion ‍ ** ||  ** Opposite opinion **  ||
 * Reason 1: Tita was in love with pedro only when she was near to him but in the distance, she was able to forget about him. || Reason 1: Tita and Pedro felt ‍love at first sight . ‍ ||
 * Reason 2: Pedro married rosaura and never tried to divorce her. || Reason 2: Tita cured Pedro's burnt because she was in love with him. ||
 * Reason 3: Pedro was always thinking about Tita's body, he never worried about her feeling. || Reason 3: Tita cared for roberto like a mother because Pedro was the father. ||
 * Reason 4: Gertrudis married to Juan because she had satisfied her desires already || Reason 4:Gertrudis married alvarez for love ||
 * Reason 5: Tita wanted to marry John but her passion for Pedro didn't let her. || Reason 5: Tita and Pedro died loving each other. ||


 * Essay #2 Pre-Writing Response**
 * Option #1:**

1. What story and theme have you chosen to write about?

2. Why did you choose this theme?

3. Are you going to be concentrating on the 1930s and 1940s in your research or on the present time

4. Write your "working thesis" here:

5. List some of the sources you will be using in your research. (Remember that your sources must be reliable—they must be from a magazine, newspaper, journal, university or government website, etc. If you can’t identify the source—it’s not acceptable!) Next to each, write why you are using this source. What information does it contain that you think you can use?


 * Option #2:**

1. What marginalized or disenfranchised group of people did you choose for your paper?

I will talk about homeless people, how they suffer with medical care, food, and shelter. 2. Why did you choose this group?

because i am really interesting in learn about why they don't get help to have a better life.

3. What do you know about this group before you do any research?

i don't know anything that i can say for sure.

4. After doing a little research, answer the following questions:

a. What are some of the causes of the disenfranchisement?

b. What are some of the effects of the disenfranchisement?

List your sources below: Remember that your sources must be reliable—they must be from a magazine, newspaper, journal, university or government website, etc. If you can’t identify the source—it’s not acceptable!

Essay #1 Final Draft Response
List any feedback you received from April and other people who read your essay. //April said that i needed to check my spelling and try not to repeat sentences.//

List what you changed for your final draft (Ex. Verbs, thesis statement) and **why**. //I changed what April told me. Erased repeated sentences and i tried to fix a little more my paragraphs.// If you had more time, what else would you change about your essay? //If i had more time i would love to make it better and longer.// What makes you proud about your essay? //I feel proud of myself becasue good or bad this essay is my second in my life and it's all mine.// Did you like writing about the theme you chose? **Why or why not?** //yes because this theme has a little bit of my own life.// What did you learn in this unit? //many things. for example, a new easier way to make an essay.//

‍‍‍‍‍‍‍‍Essay #1 Rough Draft Self-Response ‍‍‍‍‍‍‍‍
How many paragraphs does your **essay** have? It has four paragraphs. Introduction, two body paragraphs and one conclusion.

Your **introduction** should have 3-5 sentences. How many sentences are in your introduction? ‍‍‍‍‍‍‍‍It's has six sentences. Do you need to fix anything? yes If yes, what? I think that i am going to have to cut one sentence because it has more than it needed it. ‍‍‍‍‍‍‍‍

How many **body paragraphs** do you have? I have two body paragraphs.

How many sentences are in:


 * 1) Body ¶ #1: There are fifteen senteces.
 * 2) Body ¶ #2: There are thirteen senteces.
 * 3) Body ¶ #3:
 * 4) Body ¶ #4:
 * 5) Body ¶ #5:

Each **body paragraph** should have 11 sentences. Do you need to fix anything? If yes, what? ‍‍‍‍‍‍‍‍I think that my first body paragraphs have more sentences that it should be. therefore,I'll have to fix it.

‍‍‍‍‍‍‍‍ Your **conclusion** should have 3-5 sentences. How many sentences are in your **conclusion**? __Do you need to fix anything in your **conclusion**? If yes, what?__

My conclusion has five sentences but it needs to be fix because it has‍‍‍‍‍‍‍‍ repeated some words ‍‍‍‍‍‍‍‍.

What is your **word count**?

878 words.

You should have 750-1,000 words. Do you need to add more words?

No, it doesn't need more words.

Copy your **thesis** here:

I have chosen to write about "The Red Pony" in which John Steinbeck shows how Billy Buck cares for Jody as a big brother and how hard he tries to keep his promises.

Did you prove your **thesis** in the essay? How? If not, can you revise your essay to prove it more clearly?

I thimk i did a little but i need to fix some errors that i did with spelling.

Which __pre-writing__ method do you like best and why (bubble clusters, line clusters, columns etc)? I am going to use the bubbles method because i love bubbles and i think that making bubbles would make my work have a little fun.

Based on the feedback and class discussion, write your revised thesis statement here: I have chosen to write about the "The Red Pony" in which John Steiabeck shows how Billy Buck cares for Jody like a little brother and how hard he tries to keep his promises.

Please write the date here:2/9/12

Please write your name: Eva

Please write your thesis statement:I have chosen to write about "The Promise" by John Steinbeck,this short story describes how hard Billy Buck tried everything he could to keep his promise alive at any cost because some promises are easy to comply, but there are other that are hard to accomplish because it,s not up to you to do so. Hi Eva, this is a good start. I'm not clear about your body paragraphs. In the first paragraph, will you write about the promises that Billy kept? In the second body paragraph, will you wite about promises that he couldn't keep? I think your thesis needs to be clearer. :) April

Then, comment on at least one other person's page.

1. What is the "source" in the thesis statement? The Promise

2. Does it give the writer's opinion? Why or why not? yes she gave her opinion on the way that she said that there are some things that we cant really promise something that you may not be able to accomplished and that there is times were is not up to you.

3. Does it imply a structure for the essay? How many body paragraphs?no i think it needs a little more information.

(Students with "odd-numbered" tickets, ESL100Student1, ESL100Student3, etc., please comment on the next number going up, so ESL100Student1 comments on ESL100Student2, and students with "even-numbered tickets," please comment on the next number going DOWN, so ESL100Student2 comments on ESL100Student1, and so on.) Good