Karla

Like water for chocolate is a novel based
 * //Like Water for Chocolate //**** Pre-Writing **
 * Choose one question. Which question did you choose? ** 3
 * ‍‍Eventhough Titat and Pedro were not allow to be together ‍‍ they fight for their love until the end. **
 * Example: Tita is a weak character. **
 * Write your thesis statement here: **
 * Analyze your topic. Look at both sides to understand the issue. Type your reasons below. **
 * ** Your opinion ** ||  ** Opposite opinion **  ||
 * Reason 1:Pedro agreed with Mama Elena to married Rosaura to be close from his true love || Pedro never told to Mama Elena his true love was Tita ||
 * Reason 2:In their hurts they were always together || Reason 2:Socially they can never be together ||
 * Reason 3: They always looked for opportunitties to be together || Reason 3: They never stand up for what they feel ||
 * Reason 4:Tita and Pedro loved each other no matter what the circumstances were || Reason 4:They were not brave enought to fight for their love ||
 * Reason 5:Their love was stronger than the "the family tradition" || Reason 5:Their love was not posible because the "family tradition" ||


 * Essay #2 Pre-Writing Response**
 * Option #1:**

1. What story and theme have you chosen to write about? ‍‍‍‍‍‍Force Labor Children in El Salvador ‍‍‍‍‍‍ 2. Why did you choose this theme? Because it is a realty in my country. 3. Are you going to be concentrating on the 1930s and 1940s in your research or on the present time? In the present time 4. Write your "working thesis" here: Due to economic issues, it is hard for low class salvadorean kids to get decent education. Since they are not able to receive a good education, they are not able to receive a good education, they are forced to get low paying jobs to at least be able to contribute at home.

5. List some of the sources you will be using in your research. (Remember that your sources must be reliable—they must be from a magazine, newspaper, journal, university or government website, etc. If you can’t identify the source—it’s not acceptable!) Next to each, write why you are using this source. What information does it contain that you think you can use? Online news paper, Gobernment website, etc


 * Option #2:**

1. What marginalized or disenfranchised group of people did you choose for your paper? Children in El Salvador

2. Why did you choose this group? They are being marginalized because they dont have education to get a decent jod

3. What do you know about this group before you do any research? I used to live in El Salvador and I have seeing these kids forced to work intead go to school

4. After doing a little research, answer the following questions:

a. What are some of the causes of the disenfranchisement? They are marginalized because they are poor. Living conditions Economic issues

b. What are some of the effects of the disenfranchisement? Children dont't have education

List your sources below: Remember that your sources must be reliable—they must be from a magazine, newspaper, journal, university or government website, etc. If you can’t identify the source—it’s not acceptable!

Essay #1 Final Draft Response
I haven't received April's feedback yet. But what I was told from other people is that I should have talked more about Mary been dominant.
 * List any feedback you received from April and other people who read your essay.**

Introduction, Thesis Statement, Body, Conclusion. Because didn;t like my first draft, felt like didn;t have much to talk about.
 * List what you changed for your final draft (Ex. Verbs, thesis statement) and why.**

I would probably add more paragraphs in the body
 * If you had more time, what else would you change about your essay?**

I'm glad that I finally get it together. It was very challenging, but Im proud I did it. To be my first essay I think I did pretty good. Hopefully next one would much easier for me :)
 * What makes you proud about your essay?**

Yes I did. Because made realize how important is to listen other' opinions, feelings and thoughts.
 * Did you like writing about the theme you chose? Why or why not?**

Passion for read!! I learned more about reading comprehension. A lot of vocabulary and about essays structure.
 * What did you learn in this unit?**

‍‍‍‍‍‍‍‍‍‍‍‍‍Essay #1 Rough Draft Self-Response ‍‍‍‍‍‍‍‍‍‍‍‍‍
How many paragraphs does your **essay** have? 7

Your **introduction** should have 3-5 sentences. How many sentences are in your introduction? Do you need to fix anything? If yes, what?

4. Yes, I have to make this more interesting and clear.

How many **body paragraphs** do you have? 5

How many sentences are in:


 * 1) ‍‍‍‍‍‍‍‍‍‍‍‍‍Body ¶ #1: 2
 * 2) Body ¶ #2: 5
 * 3) Body ¶ #3: 4
 * 4) Body ¶ #4: 3
 * 5) Body ¶ #5: 3

Each **body paragraph** should have 11 sentences. Do you need to fix anything? If yes, what? YesI need to add more sentences in each paragraph ‍‍‍‍‍‍‍‍‍‍‍‍‍

Your **conclusion** should have 3-5 sentences. How many sentences are in your **conclusion**? __Do you need to fix anything in your **conclusion**? If yes, what?__ I dont have a conclusion

What is your **word count**? 612

You should have 750-1,000 words. Do you need to add more words? Yes, I'm missing parts in my essay, need a conclusion, a better introduction and more commentary in my body

Copy your **thesis** here: I have chosen to write about the story “The White Quail” because the author shows that the main character, Mary Heller represents a dominant, selfish and mental issues woman.

Did you prove your **thesis** in the essay? How? If not, can you revise your essay to prove it more clearly? ‍‍‍‍‍‍‍‍‍‍‍‍‍I think I need to prove it a little bit better. I need to add more commentary and make it more clearly. ‍‍‍‍‍‍‍‍‍‍‍‍‍

Which __pre-writing__ method do you like best and why (bubble clusters, line clusters, columns etc)? I like the Outlines and Columns method. It is easier for me, helps me to organize my ideas in a better way. Thanks April!

Based on the feedback and class discussion, write your revised thesis statement here: I have chosen to write about the story "The white Quail" because the author shows that the main character, Mary Teller represents a strong and bossy wife figure.

Please write the date here:

Thursday 09th 2012

Please write your name:

Karla Gonzalez

Please write your thesis statement:

The role of women has changed over the years. (The white Quail) Hi Karla, this is an okay start. I need you to carefully take notes on thesis statements so you can make your thesis as clear as possible. Make sure you put the source within the statement, not in parentheses. I think the role of women is to general. You can choose to focus on a female protagonist, but you need to be more specific about theme. It has to be a theme from one of the stories. I really like your idea, it just needs to be in a story and be more specific. :) April Then, comment on at least one other person's page.

1. What is the "source" in the thesis statemen "The White Quail"

2. Does it give the writer's opinion? Why or why not? No because,it doesn't say or pronounce anything related to the story, she just talk about women in general but not mention anything about our protagonistin the

3. Does it imply a structure for the essay? How many body paragraphs? I think is no clear, about the paragraphs involve in this thesis, because it didn't say something with base.

(Students with "odd-numbered" tickets, ESL100Student1, ESL100Student3, etc., please comment on the next number going up, so ESL100Student1 comments on ESL100Student2, and students with "even-numbered tickets," please comment on the next number going DOWN, so ESL100Student2 comments on ESL100Student1, and so on.)